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Wednesday, February 27, 2013

Lucy's Writing


My BIG Journey

“Mum, seriously, I’ll be fine,” I called out as she slowly faded away into the distance. It was my birthday and I was going on my first camp, in the jungle, alone. I live with my mum, and my only friend, Jacob. Jacob is our dog, and he loves the outdoors. Dad passed away when I was six, but I’ve gotten used to it. Anyway, back to the trip.

I reached the jungle, and smelt the fresh, cool,   air up my nose, then, I smelt danger. It was a Cayman was hiding in the nearby river. It was so close I could smell its deadly breath. Then I saw my only chance, a large piece of thick bamboo twice the size of tiny me. So to save my entire life, I grabbed the bamboo, started to sprint towards the gigantic beast, and pole-vaulted over him before he could take a bite out of my flesh.

After that, I started to run. I ran, and ran, and ran, until, I came to a big clearance. A humungous meadow in the middle of the jungle .Why hadn’t anyone found it before me? I don’t know. But all I knew was it was the perfect place to camp in the jungle.
By   Lucy   Hamilton.

4 comments:

  1. WOW Lucy great writing I love it I think you could explain a wew bit more
    By : Phoebe

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  2. great descriptive writing in there.but next time check on your spelling because i found the word cayman instead of cave man.
    from Nikita :)

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  3. great writing lucy

    i like the part when you use the
    polevolt i agree wiith nikita next
    time use the spell check i want a
    dog
    BY HECTOR
    GOOD WRITING!!:)

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  4. Wow Lucy, that sounds like a crazy jungle!

    From Mrs Skinner @ Riccarton Primary School

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