100 Word Challenge # 2.
Congratulations on your efforts last week in the 100 word writing challenge everyone! We had some fantastic entries and even had an entry from a parent! It was extremely tough to pick a winner, the winner of last weeks challenge was Liban! This week have a go at writing a creative piece of writing using the image below as a prompt. Also make sure that you take time to read other peoples entries and provide them with some feedback. If you have already entered a piece jump on Room 9's class blog and have a go at the challenge that they are running and comment on their work.
The fire flash.
ReplyDeleteI looked around searching for civilisation was I the only one left?I kept quiet as I heard the magnificent beast. It was a green dragon with giant wings .Then I felt a gust of wind behind me I didn't bother looking at what it was I started to run. Then I looked behind me It was another dragon Then I saw It we had been invaded with thousands of dragons! I looked around trying to find a place to hide . I saw a small tunnel I got in.
Then I realized that dragons can breathe fire Then suddenly...
I like the title 'The fire flash' that's very creative. The title makes me want to read more. Good job with the story, its hard to keep a story to 100 words but you have done well. I especially like how you started with that question, I could imagine someone looking around pondering that. Great Job!
DeleteGreat effort Cameron!I love that question in the first sentence "was I the only one left?". Your next step is to try and use a variety of sentence starter so you don't use 'Then I' as often. Come and see me if you would like some help with this. Fantastic writing though, have another go if you like or jump on Room 9's blog and enter their competition.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feed back and feed forward :)
DeleteOnce upon a time there was a girl skipping through the forest, she was by herself and she was walking to see the princess,then she stepped on mudd she was wondering what kind of mud is it,she screamed AH a dragon,she yelled, she saw me coming through, and i saw her in the dragon's mouth and she said help please,i found are long stick i pocked the dragon with the stick and it hit me into the mud and i was dirty i got the stick and hit her again,and she died YAY.
ReplyDeleteI liked your story Mareta! I like that the girl saved the princess from the dragon. It is cool that you used a girl to save the princess instead of a prince...Girl Power! I like a happy ending so I am glad that the dragon was defeated.
DeleteGemma Creek (Mr Creeks AWESOME sister)
One day I was on a big island with big mountains and green trees,but there was a nice bright beach I walked on the wet sand I headed into the jungle I saw a black dark cave I walked in it was cold I heard a noise it was a roar I walked in more there were rocks everywhere I touched one it was hot like lava I was thinking a volcano so I walked more I saw bones on the ground like a skull,some ribs and a spine I screamed as I saw a big green dragon.
ReplyDeleteGreat Job! I could imagine myself in your story, which is a good thing. Great use of describing words, the island you described sounds beautiful. I don't know if I would have walked into a cave after hearing a roar though I think I would be running the opposite way lol
DeleteGemma Creek (Mr Creeks Sister)
I looked around in bewilderment…how could this be? Where was the home I loved and had grown up in? The towering pine tree that I would climb to hide from the world….the backyard where my family and I would spend lazy summer days? At that moment a crunching sound beneath my feet drew me back to the present…I looked down and stared. The white fragments were almost unrecognisable but with sudden clarity I knew what I was walking on. Without warning I felt a blast of heat on the back of my neck. Cautiously I turned my head and froze.
ReplyDeleteWell, well, well Mrs Cooper hidden talents huh, great job keep up the good work.
DeleteI had lot's of free time on my hands yesterday...
ReplyDeleteStory 1:(doesn't have a name)
I turned as the Prodigious Dragon veered its horrific head. The dragon embedded its Sharp claws into the Earth and while vociferating
Veering from left to right, with every movement a thousand more details were exposed. Scales, Spikes Horns and talons.
Then I sang
“I do hope, Luck I seek
Hidden inside, take a peek
Glorious and bold
Priceless and old
You need luck, seek hope
Then You will Cope
I will climb and then I’ll flee
What has this dragon made of me”
The dragon was so elated when he knew I was scared. He has done his job
Story 2: PS I was very tired when I wrote this
Hi , My name is VoliciCrossi. I am so Elated you put that Amazing photo of me On your blog! I try really hard to Trim my Talons and sharpen my claws. So that you feel scared when I jump out.. I don’t just do this for fun those rumors are all wrong. A dragon wouldn’t hurt a fly.. Unless He came into their territory. Anyway, This is my job. To scare people and guard and protect the queen Dragon. Here’s a little song I wrote just for you.
I’m a dragon… STAY OUT OFF THIS LAND!
These are brilliant Olivia, really creative! I love the song in the first one.
DeleteI opened my eyes and found myself in the garbage disposal! There was trash everywhere and creepy insects were coming out from McDonald bags and boxes! I had no Idea what was going on so I started to walk. I was exhausted by walking on trash so I stopped and turned. When I turned I saw a humongous dragon with orange wings and a green face! I freaked out and started to run the other way and next thing you know,a wicked python was heading toward me with its tongue slithering! I closed my eyes,prepared to be killed and then...
ReplyDeleteZenib you have used some fantastic language in this entry to create some powerful images!! Cant wait to read your next entry.
DeleteI beat you rm6 can do it. Not like you can do the 100 word thing.I'll see you tomorrow Mr Creek and we'll talk about it Ah.
ReplyDeleteFROM FOLAU
Your a cheeky thing Folau, we will certainly be having words!
DeleteIt was my turn to to roll the dice it landed on 5 . i went 5 steps forward ."closet of shame" ."oh dragons" i had to go in the closet of shame.that's the scariest closet in the planet nobody likes it there because its full of hungry lions. i took a step inside i closed my eyes something strange happened there were no lions but a green huge button. I press it. i saw a dragon a huge one i heard screaming whats going on in there. its smells like dump and dragon poo. i went in. and covered my nose.........
ReplyDeleteGood work Evile another great entry, I really like the idea of it being part of a giant board game.
DeleteZAP,”Yes,the time traveler works.I must have landed in a dinosaurs nest.Oh cool,dinosaur eggs.I must not touch them.This is great,first person to travel through time.Now i can show off to that know it all jess.She will be soo mad.I will take pictures.I hope this is not a dream.”Rarrrr”.”Oh no,this isn't a dinosaur nest,its a dragons next.Dragons were real.Cool.I will be famous.Wait,a dragon.RUN!.I run into a cave.Its dark and scary.Bats fly everywhere.Quickly i sap away.goodbye.
ReplyDeleteHaha I enjoyed reading this Simone! How cool would a time machine be. I think I would go back to the 70's and rock out to the Rolling Stones. What would you do?
DeleteI was just about to eat the last human when my mum appeared. “Oh no, what have I done this time.” I mutter.
ReplyDelete“SPIKE! Stop playing with your food and go clean your room now!” My mum demanded. “But mum,” I protest. “I cleaned it last week!”
“Your lava is all over the floor and you still haven’t put your toy Gargoyles away.” She replied in response. “Can I just eat this last human and then do it? Please!” I begged.
“Spike, clean your room now. There is no human to be seen for miles.”
“But, but.”
“Hurry up Spike!”
His bright orange wings, his yellow tail, his bony green spine and sharp pointy head. He was magnificent. He was beautiful. He was the cause of this barren wasteland. There was only one human left, how long would he last? My question answered, he was gobbled up immediately. I brushed off my tail, wiped dust off my wings and smeared blood on my lips. I flew over and battered my eyelids. He frowned. Why? Wait, what was that. Those things in a nest. No, no, no. I closed my eyes. Dragon eggs. He was taken. I fell down and sobbed.
ReplyDeleteLoving the detail in this piece of writing Melanie, that first sentence leaves me with a really clear picture in my head. You have shown some great imagination.
DeleteIt was no ordinary day at New Shower Curtain the dragon from the underworld called "HELL".It was daring enough to devour
ReplyDeletethe souls of its victims they call it Tibuya.It broke free from its cave and reached the beauty of Earth after 10 minutes or so earth was the spew of a Gorilla and that's not a good sight then rose a hero then the battle was on and earth was saved but on by a citizen who bravely stood out of the crowd and threw multiple rocks at its head till it had clean gigantic gash
Haha "the spew of the earth"? Only you Zac! The brave lone citizen sounds like you after you put that MASSIVE hit on at rugby last week. keep up the great writing mate.
DeleteThe Dragon's Cave
ReplyDeleteOnce upon a time a boy sat beneath an apple tree and watched a mob of farmers charge up the hill,pitchfork waving,heading to the Dragon's cave.He closed his eyes and waited for the roar. RRROOOAAARRR!!!!A pack of screaming farmers carrying scorched pitchforks ran down the hill,half-heartedly pursued by a massive scaly green lizard with wings.Until it stopped,the dragon walked up to the boy and grumbled.The boy starts to run and was screaming for help.He was running and running and he never noticed that he was in the dragons cave.He stopped and scream again....He's trap.
The End
107 words
By:Micah
Awesome Micah!! What a fantastic piece of writing. I can just imagine a pack of pitch fork wielding farmers charging up the hill and then running back down with their tails between their legs. This is a real contender!
DeleteI mean trapped...
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