The Wrong Gear
It was the 20th of December when Ken and I went on a bike ride in the
bottle lake forest. I was really excited because I never had been on the track
be for.
Ken had said to me earlier that there are big hills and slops. I
didn’t believe him. We started slow but we had to pedal up a big hill followed
by a big slop. “Ken was right” I ground. I speed up suddenly… a bird’s nest with eggs in it on the track
in front of me. I swerved off the track and in to the bush. I got up and picked
my bike up and walked home Ken had bet me home he didn’t care I fell off my
bike.
Mum saw how broses and scratched
I was she had a fit at ken told him to never to do it again or I will never
ride with him again. Then I finally got to sit down and relax.
By Amy
Well done Amy!! I love the way you have used dialogue. The title is a great play on words.
ReplyDeletegreat job Amy.
ReplyDeletei loved the way you started with a coluer full title.
from Nikita :)
Wicked, Amy! I loved how you put that your mum had a fit. Maybe next time you could put how you felt.
ReplyDeleteFrom Lucy.
I like the start where you said you didn't belive him when he said there are big hills and slopes. but I think that you could write a bit more next time.
ReplyDeleteBy Blaithan :)
i realy liked your story i liked the part when ken got told off
ReplyDeleteby hunter
I really like this story is great I really like how you put feeling into the story I have to admit it really felt like i was there riding on my bike with ken and you
ReplyDeleteby Cullen